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In this post, I am to comment on the “nothing can stop the claw” text written by LilleVoffsen. The title itself is catching and intriguing, which is an efficient way to make the audience interested in reading the blog post. The author continues to intrigue the reader by having a funny and interesting sort of a “catch line” as the first sentence, while also establishing the topic of the post, Ronnie Van Hout’s hand-sculpture “Quasi”.
The text is in general easy to read, but there’s quite a lot of facts and information about the artist, locations and names that can make the reader uninterested. The first proper paragraph could’ve been shortened and simplified by dividing some of the sentences and making them shorter, or even spread the information more throughout the entire text. There’s also some questionable paragraph’s, and I think the author could benefit from working on structuring the text better.
Next, the author writes about Van Hout’s art style, and how it is “disturbing and provocative”, which is an interesting topic and a great opportunity to integrate the syllabus and start a discussion. Unfortunately, I think this section of the text is the most confusing. Most of the sentences are quite interesting, but there’s not really any coherence between the different topics. He/she starts with writing about the meaning behind Quasi, and suddenly jumps to rejected art pieces after a tragic earthquake. On the other hand, there’s some interesting topics, I just think the author could’ve gone a little deeper into each subject.
Finally, LilleVoffsen brings some interesting syllabus into the blog post, and highlights the thoroughly discussed problem that is “should an artist make art to please the audience”. I’m not sure how I feel about his/hers conclusion on the topic, as I don’t feel like he/she really answer any of the questions and issues that is brought up. The post finishes with a couple of open questions, and a statement I find uncanny and irrelevant.
All in all, I think the text has a lot of potential. There could be a better flow to the text, to capture the reader and making them want to read more. It needs some work to become a good consistent blog post, but it has a lot of interesting points and topics, which could evolve into a great discussion about a current issue in the art industry.
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