In this blogpost I am going to respond to extrasalah´s blogpost. As far as I can see there is no tittle on the blogpost. Instead it starts with a picture of the opera house in Oslo. The structure of the text is short paragraphs with under tittles. Typically a blogpost would not have several titles, that is more common for other types of texts. In a blog format the text flows better without these extra titles during the text.
In the first paragraph extrasalah introduces us shortly to the art markets and he explains that art markets is more than just the money. Then he goes on in a new paragraph explaining shortly what Zoloni´s opinion is and how the marked is divided into four main markets.
After introducing Zoloni´s opinion extrasalah rolls up all the different categories, in a very oral language. This fits well for a blogpost. He speaks to the reader in a good way. Then he continues to include the reader while explaining the different kinds of markets. He also asks questions during the text. This is good for the reader´s reflection.
To wrap up the text extrasalah ends with a conclusion. Here he includes his own opinions to the theory. I think is good, and I wish he wrothe like this during the whole text. The final paragraph is way more interesting to read than the first part of the text, because it is something more than just dry theory directly from classes. The last paragraph is also the fullest with it´s 6 lines, compared to the other ones with only 2-3 lines. This also helps on the flow while reading.
For this blogpost my suggestion is less dry theory. If he uses the theory as a fundament in the text, and then spices up with own opinion during the while text it will be more interesting for the reader. I would love and explanation to the choice of picture. Also don´t forget a tittle for the post. With a tittle it makes it easier for the reader to prepare for what it is going to read. I would cut out the under titles during the text, because it creates more chaos than order for the reader in this occasion. I would also recommend less and fuller paragraphs. This helps the reader to not fall off while reading.
When the whole text is basically just a very very short summary of the power points from class I probably think it would be nice to have a reference on the bottom line of the text. Just to make sure the reader that haven’t had the course about art and design will understand where all the information comes from. When that is said I also think it is a positive thing that the author has included syllabus in the text in a clearly way. I just wish it was more used in the text, so extrasalah could show that he understood what he had learned.
Making sense of art and design industries 