By Guccihilde
This text is very valuable if you want to know more about what Tesla can offer you as a costumer. The writer of this task demonstrate that he or she knows a lot about Tesla as a brand, and obviously has an positive opinion about Tesla cars and their solutions. I think you should clarify if there are any challenges for Tesla compared to their competitors, even though they are the leaders of the market.
The language and the length of the text is absolutely great, and its interesting to know what Tesla is specialized in. I think you should use more syllabus and information from the PowerPoint from Its learning and class. On the exam, we have to show the sensors that we understand the task and design markets. You can for example specify the industrial networks approach to mapping art, which designer market Tesla belongs to and why. Also use your own point of view and emotions.
The task is about the design industries, and you really describe in a good way the different types of solutions Tesla use when it comes to design, and the purpose of the design. I would appreciated to read more about the designers and artists behind the hard work, and how they became so successful.
One requirement for the task is to include pictures and to use the properly according to BI´s rules of copyrighted images. You have put down the link below, but I will recommend you to check out the guidelines for copyrighted images.
As I said, the text has a high academic language level, which is appreciated in formal texts.
I don’t think this is necessary in the category of blog posts, because its not that understandable for everyone who reads it. In the end I want to tell you that this text looks very good, I am actually impressed about the language. I can see that you have put down a lot of work on it.
Best regards,
Guccihilde
Making sense of art and design industries 